Shallowheart || Deputy

[silver[[rivid]]]

Name: Shallowheart
Age: 18 moons
Gender: tome
Clan: DarkClan
Rank: Warrior

Appearance: Dark gray tome with spark-colored yellow eyes. Look like he's gonna kill yah without a thought, which is sometimes true. Is thin and muscular, with well pointed ears and broadish shoulders. Has a cold, murderous look in his eyes with the prospect of battle, and his tail is completely black.
Description: Is silent a lot, whichis useful when hunting or on patrols. Loves to swim, and finds hunting to be pure joy. Has a col-heart and is willing to do anything that involves bloodshed. He is completely the opposite of his brother.
History:
Born and raised...: In the forest of Darkclan. Shallowheart was never really cared for by other cats, and he watched over himself from the beginning.
Deeds: Has killed many cats in his past, but resolves only to say, "I did it in self-defense."
Family: Mum-Stormcloud {dead} Killed by greencough
...........Dad-Wolfblood {dead} Killed by a badger
...........Sister-Frostylight {dead} Killed by Shallowheart
...........Sister-Flightwing {dead} Killed by Shallowheart
...........Brother-Rividwinter {alive} Envied, hated by Shallowheart
Mates: None, was said that he loved his brother's mate Freezefang, and was the one whohad killed her. Nobody knos fur sure.
Ranks: Kit then apprentice
Clans: Just DarkClan, but in his head, Shallowheart says he is part of the Wolves.
The death of a sister...: Shallowheart said he had heard that his sister was plotting treason. She had plans to take down the leader, all lives at once, in the night. Shallowheart at that time, was actually very loyal, and he was willing to kill his own blood to save others of his Clan. When his sister took off to kill the leader, Shallowheart followed close behing, shadowing her every move. At te one point she was beginning to fell confident, she relaxed her guard, and Shallowheart struck. A swift bite to the neck was all that was necesssary...
Notes: Nothing of impoartance, just that Shallowheart only killed his sister because she had been plotting treason...

[Cheetah]

It's a good bio, but please add a bit more on where he was born and how he killed his sister, if it is not an RP plot:)

[silver[[rivid]]]

There, Cheeteh. I fixed it fur yah. I hope it is some bit better.

[yami-chan]

Yes this is better, accepted and moved. ^^