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Post by yami-chan on Feb 28, 2008 17:15:43 GMT -5
Alright, I have decided to help any of you out there who wish to have better rping skills. Now I'm not saying I'm the best one, because I'm not. There are plenty of other people out there that are better then meh. On another site I joined called Hiddenclans when I first joined my rping skills sucked, so I trained with some people to get better. Cheetah has done so much to keep this site active, so now I have decided to help out by rubbing off some of my talent on all u peoples out there! xD So come on down, I don't bite, I swear! Also I'll give you a cookie for rewards. Students- Lion Skyshadow Cheetah
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Post by lionstorm on Feb 29, 2008 9:12:17 GMT -5
I like cookies. Hi Nighteh.
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Post by yami-chan on Feb 29, 2008 18:31:56 GMT -5
Heyy Lion! Glad u came! ^^ Here is your promised cookie. *Gives Lion a cookie* And since u are my first student here is another. *Gives another cookie to Lion* Whenever u are ready we can start. Just post a sample of your rping and I'll see what needs fixing.
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Post by xX Skyshadow Xx on Mar 1, 2008 15:22:18 GMT -5
I'd like to learn too! I'm decent at RPing but I love your style, Nighteh. By the way, just call me Skyshadow. P.S. Sorry but I've kind of adopted your RPing text style with size 1 and colour. Starsight stalked through the undergrowth, moonlight bathing her pelt. Her ears pricked at the sound of a bird fluttering nearby but she wasn't intrested in hunting tonight. Her pace slowed as she came to a small pond. It looked as if a piece of the starry sky had fallen to the ground. Starsight crouched to lap water from the pond, ripples spread out over the black water and disturbing the calm. Then she closed her eyes and waited for dreams to come. So... um... what do you think?
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Post by Cheetah on Mar 2, 2008 9:08:17 GMT -5
May I just randomly pop in? I want to learn new stuff, too:) Lolz, call me Cheetah ;D
Cheetahwind quietly padded out of the nursery, trying not to wake up her kits and Clanmates. Now that her kits were almost apprentice aged, the only calm time she had was the night, where she ran around the forest, competing for speed with the twoleg monsters and sometimes even winning. She walked out of the camp, slipping beside the guard so silently he did not notice the small cheetah-spotted warrior. As soon as she was out of his hearing, she ran at full speed, branches and twigs snapping under her paws. Finally, after two laps around NightClan territory, breathing the fresh forest air, she settled down beside the Starwaters, relaxing her muscles. Here, she would wait until almost dawn, when she could run back to camp, the morning air ruffling her fur.
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Post by lionstorm on Mar 2, 2008 17:55:02 GMT -5
"What do you think," meowed Mockingpelt as he walked out of the warriors den with Lionstorm. They had done a little chat about what was going on in the terittories and wanted to know what she thought. Hoping that Lionstorm would think that it was good he walked of to where they where headed out of the clan.
Same here and for me Lion or Lionstorm.
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Post by yami-chan on Mar 4, 2008 18:22:01 GMT -5
lolz, thats ok Sky, I don't mind you copying my style. ^^ And sure both of you can join, here are your cookies. *Hands out cookies*
Skyshadow- Alright first I will start with Skyshadow. It's very well written because you have put in details and explanations about what things look like. Where she is, what she looks like, all that stuff. But what you could do is make your posts more interesting, that way more people will read them and not get so board and just skimming through it. (not saying it is boring ><) Really grasp your charrie, explain what she is feeling, what her thoughts are, explain what the water tasted like, what the grass felt like. All that will make your post thicker and longer.
Cheetahwind- Nicely done, you have put her thoughts and feelings in, as well as a meaning to your post. You have something to work off of, a plot type thing. But what I would like you to do is explain what your charrie looks like, explain the surroundings. Also don't just say she ran around Nightclan two times, explain the run in another paragraph, explain what she is feeling or what she sees while running.
Lion- Ok, Lion thats a good start but your post needs an idea, a plot to it. Something like hunting or fighting an enemy, something that will make it interesting. But I do like the way you started off with your post, you can work with that very well. Also to make your post a lot longer describe your charries thoughts, feelings, and what they look like. Take more time in your posts, don't rush through them, if you need some time to think thats fine. You can become a really good rper I know you can. ^^
If you guys want I can post an example.
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Post by Cheetah on Mar 4, 2008 20:25:54 GMT -5
That would be awesome:) And descriing the surroundings and the looks would indeed be a very good idea!
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Post by xX Skyshadow Xx on Mar 4, 2008 20:45:53 GMT -5
Thanks Nighteh! I'll expand on my old paragraph. .:Before:. Starsight stalked through the undergrowth, moonlight bathing her pelt. Her ears pricked at the sound of a bird fluttering nearby but she wasn't intrested in hunting tonight. Her pace slowed as she came to a small pond. It looked as if a piece of the starry sky had fallen to the ground. Starsight crouched to lap water from the pond, ripples spread out over the black water and disturbing the calm. Then she closed her eyes and waited for dreams to come. .:After:. Starsight stalked lightly through the undergrowth, moonlight bathing her pelt. She almost didn't notice the brambles tearing at her pelt, her mind was focused on her destination. Her ears pricked at the sound of a fluttering bird but that was ignored, too. He pace quickened as she neared the clearing, a flat out run by the time she reached it.
Panting slightly, she broke through the ferns. Her blue eyes flashed with excitment, the golden flecks glowing just as brightly as the stars. The grass felt cool and welcoming on her paws after the pads had been torn at by the pine needles that littered the forest floor. Step by step, she got closer to the pool in the middle of the clearing. It seemed as if a peice of the sky had fallen to the groung, stars reflected perfectly in it's watery depths.
Starsight's breathing quickened again. Not from tiredness, but from fear. She wasn't sure what she would see once the cool pond water had lulled her too sleep but she did know there was no escaping the nightmare of a life she was in until she understood what was going on, and she hoped that dreams were the quickest way to find out.
Crouching, she lapped water from the pool. The astonishing coldness that came with it sent a shiver down her spine. Then she was falling into an inevitable darkness. Wow, that helped alot! P.S. Thank you for the cookie! *eats cookie*
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Post by Cheetah on Mar 4, 2008 20:51:53 GMT -5
Silvergrace
Looking around the clearing, she found herself surveying cats of both Clans, cats she knew, chatted with or fought with, either way. Under the thin brown branches, covered in snow, she found Embersky, sitting alone in the clearing, now that Silverstrike was the new, young leader. She was only a few seasons younger than her, but that is what made the black femme more experienced in the world of leadership.
Sighing lightly, she turned around in time to see the rest of the two Clans pour into the watery clearing, full of melting snow that turned into cold, dirty water. Carefully stepping over the puddles, but still getting her fur wet, she marched over to the Great Rock, making her black pelt clearly visible and her tail high. Jumping on top, she meowed a greeting to Silverstrike. Although there was a time she hated that cat, mostly because of intense Clan rivalry and Cheetahwind, but she had warmed up to the brown tabby after the Great Battle, and as far as she knew, so did Cheeetahwind.
Snapping out from her thinking, the star-marked head jerked up, casting another glance at the clearing. Her Clan was present, with the warriors sitting in tight clusters, still not used to the fact of the truce after the huge bloodshed, Starsight sitting beside Lionstorm at the small hollow space produced by many cats over the ages, and Nightwind quietly murmuring with Moonspirit. "Each full moon, the Clans gather here to share news, just like it is today. Let everything be forgotten at the night of the truce. We shall start now, and DarkClan will go first."-she flicked her tail in signal to Silverstrike.
Better now? I tried to be more descriptive. This is copied from teh gathering post. *Eats cookie loudly, muffing all sounds*
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